I’m HOOKED! Have you visited some blogs that are participating in the Falling For Fiction hop? If not, you should. I’ve loved reading the first lines of chapters. Now it’s time for the HANGERS. They’re up and even more intriguing than the guy with the biceps in the picture above. Here are my HANGERS from Alligators Overhead.
1. Pete stared up at the mansion. It stared back, and he felt something pulling at him–something very powerful.
2. He almost jumped out of his shoes. It was that voice again, the same one he’d heard on the phone that morning, and it was a clear as if the woman had put her lips to his ear.
3. As Pete dropped the money into Sylvan Karp’s outstretched hand, loud gunshots burst from inside the row of new growth trees and everyone, even the protesters, fell silent.
4. They were too late.
David P. King says
These are awesome hangers, C. Lee. π
Kelley Lynn says
So scared! This is an awesome visual:
He almost jumped out of his shoes. It was that voice again, the same one he'd heard on the phone that morning, and it was a clear as if the woman had put her lips to his ear.
Trisha says
Nice lines – I think I have to choose #1 as a favourite, though π
Kelly Hashway says
You have me hooked!
Old Kitty says
Oh these sentences are wonderful!! My goodness – so much tension in so few words!! Excellent stuff! Yay! Take care
x
Medeia Sharif says
These are all quite suspenseful. I can envision Pete in some dicey situations.
Margo Berendsen says
I especially like that first one, the mansion staring back! I also love the title, Alligators Overhead. Its intriguing! You usually think of alligators lurking under water…
Julie Musil says
Oooh, great hangers! I need to check out the hookers π
Cecilia M. says
Wow, I love these sentences, Lee! Now I'm eagerly looking forward to read Alligators Overhead. π
Empty Nest Insider says
I agree that you saved the best hanger for last! I can't wait to read Alligators Overhead! Thanks Lee! Julie
Stephen Tremp says
"4. They were too late."
Sometimes its the shortest sentences that make the most powerful statements. This could lead off or end a chapter very well.
M Pax says
The succinct nature of the last one is great. They're all very good though.
Ink in the Book says
I really like the last one. I would have to flip the page immediately to find out what happened.
elizabeth seckman says
"They were too late". As far as cliffhangers go, that's perfect!
C. Lee McKenzie says
This has been a great hop for two reasons: It was short and it introduced me to some new writers. I want to do more of these. How about you?
Bish Denham says
Great cliffhangers. That last one in particular!
DMS says
What great hangers! They make the reader really want to know more about the story. I think they are all great, but especially like the first two. π
~Jess
Southpaw says
Very cool. The last one is so ominous.
Barbara Watson says
Powerful! They do their job well.
Misha Gericke says
Wow. Number 3 is a really powerful hanger. π
C.M.Brown says
All three are just great! Cannot choose between them.
Nick Wilford says
Great drama and tension in these. I'm hooked (and hanging!) π
Lisa Gail Green says
Ooh I love those lines!! Especially that the mansion stared back. That's awesome. π
Hope Roberson says
Oh no! #4 is such a an excellent hanger! They all are great π
Natalie Aguirre says
Awesome end of chapter lines. They're all so good.
1000th.monkey says
Very interesting! I especially like the first one π
Reminds me of Clive Barker's 'The Thief of Always'
nutschell says
ooh! I loved the first line. Definitely got my attention.
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Rachel Schieffelbein says
Great job! Doesn't seem fair to leave us with that last one! π
Nancy Thompson says
All of these are so intense. Hard to pick a favorite. Hmm…I think the very last one is the most chilling.
Amanda Foody says
I love your third hook! Sounds awesome!
Lynn(e) Schmidt says
Numbers two and four would make it so I wouldn't be able to put the book down. Just sayin π Great job!
Jeannette says
I can't choose a favorite, but these show off some incredible storytelling. Thanks for posting!
J. A. Bennett says
#2 was fantastic, and I most assuredly turn the page after reading #4. Great job!
Leigh Covington says
Great writing! I love these! Even the last one is great. It's funny how few words can say so much at times. π
Cassie Mae says
Oh my gosh, I love the jumping out of his shoes line! The last one was awesome too. Great hangers!!!