I’m HOOKED! Have you visited some blogs that are participating in the Falling For Fiction hop? If not, you should. I’ve loved reading the first lines of chapters. Now it’s time for the HANGERS. They’re up and even more intriguing than the guy with the biceps in the picture above. Here are my HANGERS from Alligators Overhead.
1. Pete stared up at the mansion. It stared back, and he felt something pulling at him–something very powerful.
2. He almost jumped out of his shoes. It was that voice again, the same one he’d heard on the phone that morning, and it was a clear as if the woman had put her lips to his ear.
3. As Pete dropped the money into Sylvan Karp’s outstretched hand, loud gunshots burst from inside the row of new growth trees and everyone, even the protesters, fell silent.
4. They were too late.
These are awesome hangers, C. Lee. 🙂
So scared! This is an awesome visual:
He almost jumped out of his shoes. It was that voice again, the same one he'd heard on the phone that morning, and it was a clear as if the woman had put her lips to his ear.
Nice lines – I think I have to choose #1 as a favourite, though 🙂
You have me hooked!
Oh these sentences are wonderful!! My goodness – so much tension in so few words!! Excellent stuff! Yay! Take care
x
These are all quite suspenseful. I can envision Pete in some dicey situations.
I especially like that first one, the mansion staring back! I also love the title, Alligators Overhead. Its intriguing! You usually think of alligators lurking under water…
Oooh, great hangers! I need to check out the hookers 🙂
Wow, I love these sentences, Lee! Now I'm eagerly looking forward to read Alligators Overhead. 🙂
I agree that you saved the best hanger for last! I can't wait to read Alligators Overhead! Thanks Lee! Julie
"4. They were too late."
Sometimes its the shortest sentences that make the most powerful statements. This could lead off or end a chapter very well.
The succinct nature of the last one is great. They're all very good though.
I really like the last one. I would have to flip the page immediately to find out what happened.
"They were too late". As far as cliffhangers go, that's perfect!
This has been a great hop for two reasons: It was short and it introduced me to some new writers. I want to do more of these. How about you?
Great cliffhangers. That last one in particular!
What great hangers! They make the reader really want to know more about the story. I think they are all great, but especially like the first two. 🙂
~Jess
Very cool. The last one is so ominous.
Powerful! They do their job well.
Wow. Number 3 is a really powerful hanger. 🙂
All three are just great! Cannot choose between them.
Great drama and tension in these. I'm hooked (and hanging!) 🙂
Ooh I love those lines!! Especially that the mansion stared back. That's awesome. 😀
Oh no! #4 is such a an excellent hanger! They all are great 🙂
Awesome end of chapter lines. They're all so good.
Very interesting! I especially like the first one 🙂
Reminds me of Clive Barker's 'The Thief of Always'
ooh! I loved the first line. Definitely got my attention.
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Great job! Doesn't seem fair to leave us with that last one! 🙂
All of these are so intense. Hard to pick a favorite. Hmm…I think the very last one is the most chilling.
I love your third hook! Sounds awesome!
Numbers two and four would make it so I wouldn't be able to put the book down. Just sayin 🙂 Great job!
I can't choose a favorite, but these show off some incredible storytelling. Thanks for posting!
#2 was fantastic, and I most assuredly turn the page after reading #4. Great job!
Great writing! I love these! Even the last one is great. It's funny how few words can say so much at times. 🙂
Oh my gosh, I love the jumping out of his shoes line! The last one was awesome too. Great hangers!!!